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Mary's avatar

I loved some of the descriptions like "Your lips go numb as the blood drains from your face and into your toes" and the line "Wishing it was you wrapped around her." You created a vivid picture of the end of a relationship. Well done.

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Ferni Escoto's avatar

Thank you so much. I appreciate you reading and for this amazing comment :)

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Andy Bates's avatar

A moment all too familiar. Heart breaking.

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Ferni Escoto's avatar

So so so heartbreaking! <3

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Nevena Pascaleva's avatar

A beautifully captured moment of a world-shattering emotion!

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Ferni Escoto's avatar

Thank you for the commend and for reading 🥹💓

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Vince Roman's avatar

Is this part of a longer piece?

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Ferni Escoto's avatar

It's not, but it definitely could be made into a longer piece. Tempting!!! It's so uncommon to find writing in 2nd POV so I just made it short for experimenting >.>

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